C 13 L 14 Total 27/40
Good effort put in to develop an interesting story. The writng offers a variety of sentence structures, including apt use of questions at the right junctures. Almost free from language mistakes. SHould have been more vivid in the description of the damages and injuries. Some ideas can be further developed for a stronger content.
Good Vocab
1. consumed with shock and guilt
2. spurted everything without even stopping to catch my breath
3. shuffling footsteps of an approaching person
Mistakes
1. A screeched of brakes
2. twentyth August
3. had ran
Saturday, June 6, 2009
CW feedback - Hwee Hean's writing
C 14 L 13 Total 27/40
Hwee Hean never fails to impress me with his abundance of ideas and fluency in expressing them. This piece of narraction is evident of a budding writer. There are some missing loops that need to be filled in. Some ideas have become dead wood because they are not addressed in the later part of the story. A couple of spelling mistakes too.
Good Vocab
1. bracing himself
2. throaty and raspy voice
3. smiled sheepishly
4. gingerly wrapped
Mistakes
1. pespiring
2. only 45 cents
3. school bullys
4. convinence store
5. four metres away from the sight of the accident
6. cordorned off
Hwee Hean never fails to impress me with his abundance of ideas and fluency in expressing them. This piece of narraction is evident of a budding writer. There are some missing loops that need to be filled in. Some ideas have become dead wood because they are not addressed in the later part of the story. A couple of spelling mistakes too.
Good Vocab
1. bracing himself
2. throaty and raspy voice
3. smiled sheepishly
4. gingerly wrapped
Mistakes
1. pespiring
2. only 45 cents
3. school bullys
4. convinence store
5. four metres away from the sight of the accident
6. cordorned off
CW feedback - Yan Bo's writing
C 14 L 13 Total 27/40
Good attempt in application of good vocabulary in the composition. However, it is not very clear to the readers whether the main character was walking or cycling. Writer needs to be clearer in expressing the ideas.
Good Vocab:
1. muttered matter-of-factly
2. an earth-shattering boom
3. thrown in the air like a rag doll
4. landed in a heap
5. knew the gravity of the situation
Mistakes:
1.... as they rush out og the school...
2. "Let's cycle fastly across the road."
3. At the juncture, a car is speeding towards John.
4. John was threw in the air...
5. "Quickly, sent hm to the hospital!" I shouted.
Good attempt in application of good vocabulary in the composition. However, it is not very clear to the readers whether the main character was walking or cycling. Writer needs to be clearer in expressing the ideas.
Good Vocab:
1. muttered matter-of-factly
2. an earth-shattering boom
3. thrown in the air like a rag doll
4. landed in a heap
5. knew the gravity of the situation
Mistakes:
1.... as they rush out og the school...
2. "Let's cycle fastly across the road."
3. At the juncture, a car is speeding towards John.
4. John was threw in the air...
5. "Quickly, sent hm to the hospital!" I shouted.
CW feedback - Jin Hao's writing
C 15 L 14 Total 29/40
Very fluent piece. Almost error free in terms of language. However, details such as the damage of the accident and the severity of the cyclist's injuries were not given. Also, writer did not explain why there was a need for the cyclist to be hospitalised for two months. Try not to include how the characters are punished by law eg. jail terms or fines. We've discussed that in class many times and have concluded that it is not realistic to write that.
Good vocab:
1. a horn blared
2. the screeching of tyres
3. bore the brunt of the impact
4. stood mouth agape
5. crushed under the car
Mistakes:
1. strecher
2. When he regained conscious, ...
3. He saw his parents by his side as well as the passer-by that saved his life.
2.
Very fluent piece. Almost error free in terms of language. However, details such as the damage of the accident and the severity of the cyclist's injuries were not given. Also, writer did not explain why there was a need for the cyclist to be hospitalised for two months. Try not to include how the characters are punished by law eg. jail terms or fines. We've discussed that in class many times and have concluded that it is not realistic to write that.
Good vocab:
1. a horn blared
2. the screeching of tyres
3. bore the brunt of the impact
4. stood mouth agape
5. crushed under the car
Mistakes:
1. strecher
2. When he regained conscious, ...
3. He saw his parents by his side as well as the passer-by that saved his life.
2.
CW feedback - Nadiah's writing
Nadiah - C 16 L 13 Total 29/40
Good writing but need to be more mindful in your tenses.
Good Vocab:
1. preparing for the worse
2. the worse was yet to come
3.my prayer was not answered
4. exclaimed in disbelief
5. in quick succession
6. not in a clear state of mind
Mistakes made:
1. How could passers-by just stood there...
2. Why don't they rush...
3. At the corner of my eyes,
4. Every one at the bus-stop were helding their breath.
5. He was laying sprawled on the floor.
6. How inconsiderate can they be?
7. He should not have drink.
Good writing but need to be more mindful in your tenses.
Good Vocab:
1. preparing for the worse
2. the worse was yet to come
3.my prayer was not answered
4. exclaimed in disbelief
5. in quick succession
6. not in a clear state of mind
Mistakes made:
1. How could passers-by just stood there...
2. Why don't they rush...
3. At the corner of my eyes,
4. Every one at the bus-stop were helding their breath.
5. He was laying sprawled on the floor.
6. How inconsiderate can they be?
7. He should not have drink.
Thursday, June 4, 2009
Maths Practice 1 Results
Dear pupils
Remember to bring your Practice 1 Paper 1 to class tomorrow. Think through the questions and do the corrections before class. Be prepared to clarify any doubts. We only have 2 hours tomorrow and will be racing against time. Please come prepared.
Mdm Toh
1
ANG QI JIAN
99
2
WU JINGNI
96
3
KEE KAH LOK
95.5
4
LIM QIAN WEI
93
5
LOW SONG DA EMERSON
92
6
LOH XIAO QI
90
7
ONG WEI LONG
87
8
LI ZHIXIAN, RODRICK
86
9
PEI YAN BO
85
10
YU JING JIE
85
11
NAVETHIRA D/O RAVI CHANDRAN
83
12
ZACKIR HUSSAIN AJMAL ARSATH
83
13
CHIA YUN SHAN
82
14
NUR NAAZILAH BTE HIDAYATULLAH
81
15
TAN GUAN MIN
81
16
AW HWEE HEAN
80
17
NG YAN ZHEN
80
18
FONG WEI DENG
79
19
WOON WEE HAN, EUGENE
79
20
SIM WEI JIE, EDRICK
73
21
GOH JIA YING, CHRISTABEL
70
22
LIM XUE TING SHIRLEY
67
23
MUHAMMAD ASYRAF B ADAM
67
24
AO MINGYI, BELINDA
65
25
SEE JIA YI
64.5
26
HASZIRAH BTE GHANI
63
27
TRICIA LIM YUN QI
62
28
ELUMALAI VAISHNAPRIYA
61
29
SNG JIA HUI
56
Remember to bring your Practice 1 Paper 1 to class tomorrow. Think through the questions and do the corrections before class. Be prepared to clarify any doubts. We only have 2 hours tomorrow and will be racing against time. Please come prepared.
Mdm Toh
1
ANG QI JIAN
99
2
WU JINGNI
96
3
KEE KAH LOK
95.5
4
LIM QIAN WEI
93
5
LOW SONG DA EMERSON
92
6
LOH XIAO QI
90
7
ONG WEI LONG
87
8
LI ZHIXIAN, RODRICK
86
9
PEI YAN BO
85
10
YU JING JIE
85
11
NAVETHIRA D/O RAVI CHANDRAN
83
12
ZACKIR HUSSAIN AJMAL ARSATH
83
13
CHIA YUN SHAN
82
14
NUR NAAZILAH BTE HIDAYATULLAH
81
15
TAN GUAN MIN
81
16
AW HWEE HEAN
80
17
NG YAN ZHEN
80
18
FONG WEI DENG
79
19
WOON WEE HAN, EUGENE
79
20
SIM WEI JIE, EDRICK
73
21
GOH JIA YING, CHRISTABEL
70
22
LIM XUE TING SHIRLEY
67
23
MUHAMMAD ASYRAF B ADAM
67
24
AO MINGYI, BELINDA
65
25
SEE JIA YI
64.5
26
HASZIRAH BTE GHANI
63
27
TRICIA LIM YUN QI
62
28
ELUMALAI VAISHNAPRIYA
61
29
SNG JIA HUI
56
5 Maths questions a day (2)
1. There were 3/4 as many boys as girls at a birthday party. After 12 boys left the party and 8 more girls joined the party, there were 30 more girls than boys remaining at the party. Find the number of boys at the party at first. (5m)
2. Jon and Hakim saved $804 altogether. 1/5 of Jon’s savings was $48 less than 1/4 of Hakim’s savings. How much more did Hakim save than Jon? (5m)
3. A car and a van travelled from A to B. The car reached B in 2h but the van had only travelled 70% of the distance. The speed of the van was 30km/h slower than the car.
a) Find the distance between A and B. (3m)
b) Find the speed of the van in km/h. (2m)
4. Hanah, Ivan and Jieli had some stickers. The ratio of the number of stickers Hanah had to the number of stickers Jieli had was 5:7. The total number of stickers Hanah and Ivan had altogether was 3 times as many stickers as what Jieli had. Ivan and Jieli had 69 stickers altogether. How many stickers did Ivan have? (4m)
5. Ben, Dan, Mark and Imran had a sum of money. Ben had 3/8 of the amount that Dan had. Dan had 60% more money than Mark. Imran had 75% of the total amount of money the three boys had. If Imran spent 25% of his money, he would have $270 left. What was the original sum of money the four boys had? (4m)
2. Jon and Hakim saved $804 altogether. 1/5 of Jon’s savings was $48 less than 1/4 of Hakim’s savings. How much more did Hakim save than Jon? (5m)
3. A car and a van travelled from A to B. The car reached B in 2h but the van had only travelled 70% of the distance. The speed of the van was 30km/h slower than the car.
a) Find the distance between A and B. (3m)
b) Find the speed of the van in km/h. (2m)
4. Hanah, Ivan and Jieli had some stickers. The ratio of the number of stickers Hanah had to the number of stickers Jieli had was 5:7. The total number of stickers Hanah and Ivan had altogether was 3 times as many stickers as what Jieli had. Ivan and Jieli had 69 stickers altogether. How many stickers did Ivan have? (4m)
5. Ben, Dan, Mark and Imran had a sum of money. Ben had 3/8 of the amount that Dan had. Dan had 60% more money than Mark. Imran had 75% of the total amount of money the three boys had. If Imran spent 25% of his money, he would have $270 left. What was the original sum of money the four boys had? (4m)
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