Writing Tip - Name your main characters

Remember to name the main characters in your composition. This makes your composition more readable.

Compare the 2 texts below. Which one is better?

Text 1:

I have always found my younger brother pesky. Sometimes, I just wish I can turn him into dust or vapour. It was only last Saturday that I realized how my younger brother is to me.

We were at Harbourfront City for the Singapore Youth Festival Arts Exhibition. My younger brother's artwork was awarded Gold. So proud was my younger brother that he kept pestering me to take him to the exhibition. To silence him, I reluctantly gave in.

The gallery was thronged with parents and their children. For fear that my younger brother might be separated from me, I held his hand, much to his dislike.

Text 2:

I have always found Alvin pesky. Sometimes, I just wish I can turn him into dust or vapour. It was only last Saturday that I realized how dear this younger brother is to me.

We were at Harbourfront City for the Singapore Youth Festival Arts Exhibition. Alvin’s artwork was awarded Gold. So proud was he that he kept pestering me to take him to the exhibition. To silence him, I reluctantly gave in.

The gallery was thronged with parents and their children. For fear that Alvin might be separated from me, I held his hand, much to his dislike.