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Attention School
The Drama-On-Stage is looking for ten actors, a light designer, a set designer, a costume designer and a makeup artist (1m). Pupils who are interested need to sign up for an audition or interview (1m) with the committee members at the canteen (1m) on Wednesday, 10 October and Thursday, 11 October 2009 at 9.30 a.m and 10.10 a.m. (1m) Rehearsals for the production will be held in the November and December 2009 (1m). Interested pupils are to provide their name, age, contact number and the position they would be signing up for during registration (1m).
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I left out a point, the rehearsal schedule for the club production in the SW6
My REFLECTION
I could not get my 15 marks for my SW-6 as I spelled the word announcement as i had forgoton to put in the 'n'.I also did not noticed the subject verb agreement for the actors.
I've a mistake in my situation writing by writing in November to December. It should be from November to December or in November and December.
Debbie Koh Teng
Mistakes i make are careless ones a few examples are the details of the place.Who is recruiting? spelling careless mistakes like committee(not sure correct or not).
The mmistake i made is that i spell recuting wrongly.i also wrote one less content
I have made a serious error that i could not forgive myself as i have lrft out a point and made some serious grammar mistakes. i would be more careful.
The mistake that i had made was that I should not have state my identity at firstand because of this I had lost one mark for my SW.The other SWs that we do in future I will take note of this point in future and I will aim for full marks the next time and I will not allow mistakes in my other SWs.
I will learn to be more mindful with my language and spelling in future.As a result of my carelessness,i had lost a lot of marks. i realised that this marks are very precious and with just a few careless mistake,i can lose my A!:(I will be more careful in all future practices of SW...
I have made a spelling error.I have spelled rehearsal as rehersal.I have also missed one point totally and have lost one mark in the process. I have also written unecessary stuff and missed a capital letter
I got full marks for tgis sw as i was carefull in my spelling and my subject verb agreement
i have only got 12 marks for my SW6 cause i've spelled 'rehearsal ' as 'rehersal'. Also, i thought that the word 'interested' is followed by for but it is actually folliwed by in. i have also wrongly interpreted the advertisement. i thought that the interview is from 9.30 a.m. to 10a.m. but it is actually 9.30a.m. and 10a.m.
I am ang qi jian.I only got 14 marks for my situational writing. I wrote you can sign up to partipate in the school canteen from 9.30an and 10.10am. It should be you can sign up to partipate in the school canteen at 9.30an and 10.10am.
I did not mention that they need to sign up for an audition or an interview with the commettee members. And i spelt the word 'interested' wrongly, i spelt it as 'intrested'.
I leave out a comma at the first part of the sentence like it should be "Here is an announcement,so please pay attention" but i leave out the comma so i was deducted 1 mark.
my reflection
my mistake are:
i express one of my content wrongly. the sentence should be 'you can sign up on 10 october and 11 october,Wednesday and Thursday at 9.30a.m. (and) 10.10a.m. at the canteen' but i wrote 'you can sign up on 10 october and 11 october,Wednesday and Thursday at 9.30a.m. (to) 10.10a.m.at the canteen'
i use the wrong word in the sentence'we will have rehearsals during november (and) december 2009' but i wrote 'we will have rehearsals (during) november to december 2009'
i left out two word in the sentence 'you will need (to furnish) the following detail.' but i worte
'you will need (-) the following detail'
Mistake that I had made in this SW is that I did not write the "from" for the date..
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for sw-6 i only spelt the and into and.then i got 13 marks.so sad right
i missed out the 'thank you' at the end , n i made a mistake by writing 'at' instead of 'from' at the part whr we nid to write November to December for the rehearsal dates .
btw , the first 2 designers spell rong le .
I forget to write the time in the sw6.If I have wroten it,I could have gotten 13 marks.I must be more careful.
fong wei deng
I should have put 'here' instead of 'there'. I also used the wrong grammar. That was why I loost 1 mark in my language.
I had done badly in the SW this time.I did not get to manage my time properly.I have to know how to manage time to read the advertisement and how to manage time to write the SW.But in the SW I did this time,I did not get to manage the time.I got 13 for this one.I had spelt the word `rehearsal' wrongly.I will try to manage the time given in the next SW.It will be a challenge for me.I will do my best next time.
I had some spelling errors.I left one point and that resulted in my dumb marks of 11.
I made two mistake by lefting out the word 'from' and it should be 'on' but i wrote 'at'.
Chia Yun Shan
Dear all students,
This is an announcement so please pay attention.
The Drama-On-Stage is looking for pupils to join our club's latest production which is named "Act It Out". We need ten actors, one light designer, one set designer, oe costume designer and one make-up artist. The rehearsal dates are from November to December 2009 and the production will be staged from 18 to 21 Janurary 2010 at the drama centre on Fraser Road. Interested to join us? Come over to the school canteen from Wednesday 10 October to Thursday 11 October 2009 from 9.30a.m. to 10.10a.m.! sign up for an audition or interview with the committee members and who knows? You might experience the excitement of working with a group of people who are passionate about acting and drama production.
Please provide your name, age, contract number and the position you would be signing up for when you register and enter the world of drama!
Yours sincerely,
Zach,
President of Drama-On-stage club
Lim Yuan Bin
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