Wednesday, June 10, 2009

CW feedback - Chloe's writing

C13 L12

Writer had written about a motorcyclist instead of a cyclist.

1. frozed
2. dailed
3. laying on the floor
4. passer bys
5. lied on the road
6. The ambulance arrived within ten minutes and the police too.

8 comments:

Haszirah said...

The word 'frozed' is not the past tense of freeze.It should be froze.

I think 'dailed' is the wrong spelling for dialed.

Passer bys should be replaced with passers-by/passers by...

Lied on the road can be replaced by 'was lying on the road'.

The ambulance arrived within ten minutes and the police too may not be the correct way of explaining that the police and ambulance had arrived.It can be replaced with 'Within ten minutes,,the ambulance and the police arrrived.

PYB said...

1. froze, freeze, frozen
2. dialled or dialed
3. lying on the floor
4. passers-by
5. laid on the road
6. both the ambulance and the police arrived within ten minutes.

valerie said...

Good Job, Haszirah and Yan Bo! :)

AQJ said...
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AQJ said...

1. froze
2. dialled/dialed
3. lying on the floor
4. passer by
5. laid on the road
6. The ambulance,together with the police arrived within ten minutes.

By:AQJ

Anonymous said...

1. froze
2. dialed
3. lying on the floor
4. passers-by
5. lyinghe road
6. The ambulance and police arrivedwithin ten minutes

PYB said...

5. lay on the road

chloechew said...

1.froze
2.dailed
3.passers-by
4.lying on the road
6.The ambulance and the police arrived within minutes