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Writer did not study the picture carefully. The picture shows a cyclist but she wrote about a motorcyclist. The logic of the flow of story has to be strengthened. More thoughts must be put in in crafting a sensible and coherent story.
1. horizontal road
2. the orange traffic light was flashing
3. When I was in a conscious state, I fount myself in the hospital
4. He scolded me for my hastiness.
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2. the orange light from the traffic light was flashing.
3. when i was in a conscious state, i found myself in the hospital.
2.The orange light was flashing in the middle of the road.
3.When I was in a concious state,I found myself in the hospital.
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