CW feedback - Guan Min's writing

C 13 L 14 Total 27/40

Good effort put in to develop an interesting story. The writng offers a variety of sentence structures, including apt use of questions at the right junctures. Almost free from language mistakes. SHould have been more vivid in the description of the damages and injuries. Some ideas can be further developed for a stronger content.

Good Vocab
1. consumed with shock and guilt
2. spurted everything without even stopping to catch my breath
3. shuffling footsteps of an approaching person

Mistakes
1. A screeched of brakes
2. twentyth August
3. had ran