Wednesday, June 10, 2009

CW feedback - Hwee Hean's Writing

C17 L17

A novel-like story woven with good vocabulary. The piece shows writer's sharp observation in things happening around him. Writer could have put the highlight on the thief rather than the angry customer and the novice waitress.

Good vocab
1. an aroma of strong coffee and freshly brewed tea wafted across the coffee shop
2. bustling business
3. oppressively hot
4. scrambled to take down their orders
5. laden with beer bottles and porcelain cups of coffee
6. berate
7. carted the thief off

Mistakes
1. hesistation
2. dailled
3. skillful
4. pespiring
5. eating & drinking

7 comments:

PYB said...

1. hesitation
2. dialled/dialed
4. perspiring
5. eating and drinking

AQJ said...

Mistakes
1. hesitation
2. dialed
3. skilful
4. perspiring
5. eating and drinking

Qian Wei said...

1. hesitation
2. dialled/dial
3. (no problem)
4. perspiring

Anonymous said...

1. hesitation
2. dialed
3. (no idea)
4. perspiring
5. eating and drinking

love♂4ever said...

1. hesitation
2. dialled / dialed
3. skilful
4. perspiring
5. eating and drinking

Xiao Qi said...

1. hesitation
2. dialled
3. skillful
4. perspiring
5. having a meal

nothing. said...

1. hesitation
2. dialled/dialed
3. skillful
4. perspiring
5. eating and drinking

-Huixin