Monday, June 8, 2009

CW feedback- Tricia's Writing

C 15 L 14

Writer's writing skills have shown significant improvement with ideas adequately developed and appropriate use of vocabulary.

1. impending danger
2. groaned in excruciating pain
3. aggravate the pain

Mistakes
1. He felt unconscious and run through the sea of faces around him.
2. he black out
3. did not realised

3 comments:

Qian Wei said...

2. he blacked out.
3. did not realise

PYB said...

1. He felt unconscious and ran through the sea of faces around him.
2. he blacked out
3. did not realise

love♂4ever said...

1. He ran through the sea of faces around him and felt unconscious.

2. He blacked out.

3. did not realise


Tricia Lim