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Dear Paul
I am wondering if you would be keen to join me to a camping trip organised by the Trekking Club. The camp will be held on Pulau Ubin (1m), North Beach campsite (1m) from 7 June to 9 June (1m). Each participant has to pay $20 (1m) which includes food and drinks. We can call Kenny at 6 885 0789 (1m) to make reservations for the camp. We have to bring along a sleeping bag, a raincoat, mosquito repellent and a torch (1m) for the camp.
Your best friend
Vincent
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I get 13 marks because should be 7 to 9 June but i write 7-9 June and i put a fullstop instead of a question mark.
I've got 14 marks because of the sentence structure error i have made.(Actually, i do not know why.)
I had lose 2 marks for my content as i had miss out writing the name of the person to call and i did not write where the camp is held at which campsite
I have made a mistake which it should be 'from 7 to 9 June' but I wrote 'on 7 to 9 June' and some grammar mistake. The mistakes caused me to lose two marks.
Debbie Koh Teng
I got 15 marks because I did not make any grammer mistakes.I must be more careful in the grammer in the next sw.
By,
fong wei deng
i did not get full marks as i wrote 7-9 june instead of 7 to 9 june
I only get 13 marks as i wrote there is a camping trip on 7-9 June.It should be there is a camping trip from 7 to 9 June.
Also, I wrote we must meet at Changi Jetty to board ferry at 9am.It should be Jetty to board the ferry at 9am.
By: Ang Qi Jian
I got 13 for my sw as I did not specifically write the part of the island where the camp was held.I also put spaces between my "your budddy" phrase and the margin
I MADE AN UNFORGIVABLE MISTAKE BY NOT SIGNING OFF. IT HAS COST ME THREE MACKS. I VOW TO BE MORE CAREFUL IN MY WORK FROM NOW ON AND I WOULD TURN OVER A NEWER LEAF
BY: AW HWEE HEAN
I get 13 marks, I think it's because of my language and some words that is not important.
i lost 2 mark because of a very silly mistake plus two mistake which is repeated many time.
i wrote 'i am e-mailing you because i would like to invite you to go on a camping trip with *you*'
which should be 'i am e-mailing you because i would like to invite you to go on a camping trip with *me*'
the next two mistake is in the same sentance.
i wrote ' It will be *on* *7-9* June, at Pulau Ubin, North Beach campsite which is a 30-minute walk from the jetty.'
it should be ' It will be from 7 to 9 June, at Pulau Ubin, North Beach campsite which is a 30-minute walk from the jetty.'
I am very happy as this is the first time I got full marks for SW.I will continue at this rate.
I got 13 marks because of my careless mistakes i made... 7 to 9 June, i right 7-9 June..I also had a few careless mistakes i felt it was silly to make..
This SW i got 12marks which i shouldn't have. If not for the language mistakes , i would have scored higher marks as i got full marks for my content.Some of the sentences i wrote sounded awkward. For example, "Each person will cost $20" which sounded awkward i think i should change it to "the fee for each person is $20" Overall, this is the second best SW i ever scored. I had never hit 13 and above..
i got 13 marks because i missed out 1 content
I got 13 marks because I wrote "I have just seen a poster on the school notice board holding a camping trip at Pulau Ubin.".The correct sentence structure of the sentence should be "I have just seen a poster on the school notice board. There will be a camping trip to Pulau Ubin."
I also wrote 'from' when signing off my work. The correct word to use is 'your best friend'.
The next time I write a sentence, I must check if there is sentence structure mistake before handing in my work.I should also check what the appropriate words I should use be it a formal letter or informal letter.
Ho Xi Min
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