Wednesday, June 10, 2009

CW feedback - Belinda's writing

C 17 L 18

An excellent piece. Good use of vocabulary and good management of the development of the story to keep the readers interested. Well done!

1. squeals and giggles from the energetic children
2. the loud chatters of housewives
3. tucking into their food
4. savour the aroma wafting from the bowl
5. piping hot soup
6. roving eyes
7. haf-zipped bag
8. shot me a blood-chilling stare
9. let loose a torrent of profanity
10. temper as foul as his face
11. a sheepish look
12. let out a hude growl

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Jia Hui said...
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Qian Wei said...

7. half-zipped bag

Jia Hui said...
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