Saturday, June 6, 2009

CW feedback - Nadiah's writing

Nadiah - C 16 L 13 Total 29/40
Good writing but need to be more mindful in your tenses.
Good Vocab:
1. preparing for the worse
2. the worse was yet to come
3.my prayer was not answered
4. exclaimed in disbelief
5. in quick succession
6. not in a clear state of mind

Mistakes made:
1. How could passers-by just stood there...
2. Why don't they rush...
3. At the corner of my eyes,
4. Every one at the bus-stop were helding their breath.
5. He was laying sprawled on the floor.
6. How inconsiderate can they be?
7. He should not have drink.

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