C 15 L 14 Total 29/40
Very fluent piece. Almost error free in terms of language. However, details such as the damage of the accident and the severity of the cyclist's injuries were not given. Also, writer did not explain why there was a need for the cyclist to be hospitalised for two months. Try not to include how the characters are punished by law eg. jail terms or fines. We've discussed that in class many times and have concluded that it is not realistic to write that.
Good vocab:
1. a horn blared
2. the screeching of tyres
3. bore the brunt of the impact
4. stood mouth agape
5. crushed under the car
Mistakes:
1. strecher
2. When he regained conscious, ...
3. He saw his parents by his side as well as the passer-by that saved his life.
2.
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