Wednesday, June 10, 2009

CW feedback - Navethira's writing

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Interesting piece. Writer was able to sustain the reader's interest with fast paced development of events and a surprising twist in the end. Quite a few spelling mistakes to correct.

1. my father than apologised to the man
2. my father then retrieved his particulars.
3. decibles
4. inocent
5. mastered up the courage
6.murmed
7. hillarious

8 comments:

PYB said...

1. my father then apologised to the man
3. decibels
4. innocent
5. mustered up the courage
6. murmured
7. hilarious

AQJ said...

3. decibels
4. innocent
5. mustered up the courage
6.murmured
7. hilarious

Qian Wei said...

1. my father apologised to the man.
2. my father retrieved his particulars.
3. decibels
4. innocent
5. mustered up the courage
6. murmured
7. hilarious

Anonymous said...

1. Then, my father apologised to the man
2. Then, my father retrieved his particulars.
3. decibels
4. innocent
5. maustered up the courage
6. murmured
7. hilarious

Jia Hui said...
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love♂4ever said...

1. my father then apologised to the man.
2. Then, my father retrieved his particulars.
3. decibels
4. innocent
5. mustered up the courage
6. murmured
7. hilarious

Jia Hui said...

-my father then apologised to the man.
-Then, my father retrieved his particulars.
-decibels
-innocent
-mustered up the courage
-murmured
-hilarious

Xiao Qi said...

1.My father then apologised to the man
3.decibels
4.innocent
5.mustered up the courage
6.mummured
7.hilarious