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Wednesday, June 10, 2009

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A very fluent piece with events unfolding logically.

1. their backs was facing me
2. in the corner of my eye, I noticed...

PYB said...: 1. their backs were facing me
2. out of the corner of my eye, I noticed...; June 22, 2009 at 1:48 PM
Jia Hui said...: This comment has been removed by the author.; June 22, 2009 at 4:51 PM
AQJ said...: 1.their backs were facing me
2. At the corner of my eyes, I noticed..; June 22, 2009 at 5:36 PM
Qian Wei said...: 1. their back were facing me
2. at the corner of my eyes, i noticed...; June 22, 2009 at 7:51 PM
Anonymous said...: This comment has been removed by the author.; June 22, 2009 at 8:18 PM
Anonymous said...: 1. their backs were facing me
2. at the corner of my eye, I noticed...; June 23, 2009 at 12:53 PM
nothing. said...: 1. their backs were facing me
2. At the corner of my eye, I noticed,...

-Huixin; June 23, 2009 at 10:26 PM
Jia Hui said...: -their backs were facing me
-from the corner of my eye, I noticed...; June 24, 2009 at 11:54 AM
Xiao Qi said...: 1. Their backs were facing me
2. out of the corner of my eye,i noticed .........; June 24, 2009 at 7:56 PM